Nice, work on the grammar a little, the "boat" is personified, but perhaps not in the way you intended, perhaps reference the Captain
"... Whose captain just finished getting to the main island from a resource base."
And then introduce your characters
"The sailor noticed the troops and buildings all destroyed and the sailor noticed..." might become
"A keen eyed sailor, still young and eager noticed..."
which might sound less anonymous in style, but might be just what you were looking for? I wish more people would take the time and fan art.