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Offline BB_Radley1

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« on: Jul 27, 2016, 01:00 AM »
... Who just finished getting to the main island from a resource base. Once the resources were delivered the resource boat returned to the resource island to get more resources. But when the resource boat arrived. The sailor noticed the troops and buildings all destroyed and the sailor noticed that the resource island was now the enemy's property. The sailor could see the defending troops surrendering and being taken prisoner as the resource island's defenses were getting demolished by the opposing forces. So the sailor returned to the main island to warn the commander of what hapened to his resource base. The commander enraged immediately loaded his landing craft with a massive army of heavies and zookas and sent his fleet to attack the enemy and re-capture what was once theirs by right. After a long and fierce battle, the island resource base was recaptured all thanks to 1 surviving zooka who shot into the outpost of the base and caused a massive underground explosion chain reaction that caused all the remaining buildings, linked to the resource base, to explode. The resource base was theirs once again!
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 And then it got re-captured.

Offline rowman">BB_rowman

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« Reply #1 on: Jul 27, 2016, 01:00 AM »
And so the cycle goes on, and on, and on .........

Offline BB_zaphodikus

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« Reply #2 on: Jul 31, 2016, 01:00 AM »
Nice, work on the grammar a little, the "boat" is personified, but perhaps not in the way you intended, perhaps reference the Captain
 "... Whose captain just finished getting to the main island from a resource base."
 
 And then introduce your characters
 "The sailor noticed the troops and buildings all destroyed and the sailor noticed..." might become
 "A keen eyed sailor, still young and eager noticed..."
 which might sound less anonymous in style, but might be just what you were looking for? I wish more people would take the time and fan art.

Offline BB_ToadStorm

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« Reply #3 on: Aug 03, 2016, 01:00 AM »
Stronger and stronger the bases get. :eek:

Offline BB_Radley1

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« Reply #4 on: Aug 05, 2016, 01:00 AM »
You guys can edit this,  i wish i knew how to 3D animate so i could make this story an animation.

Offline BB_zaphodikus

Exclamation There once was a resource boat...
« Reply #5 on: Aug 06, 2016, 01:00 AM »
@Radley , been done in minecraft or similar engines many times.